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PostSubject: dax's re-edited bio   Sat May 14, 2011 8:27 pm



age:13

race: beast

Class: bounty hunter

height: 5.8 1/4 (this is my actual height =P)

weight: 120

personality: smart half the time, and a strategic, thinks of others before himself

weapon(s): a sword that allows him to transmit his powers through, and a dna glove which uses the dna of another person to let the user of the glove use that person powers.

alliance: the kels =3

type(s): cloud/lightning

[size=24]strengths:
close combat, Defense, barriers

weakness: coke, even though range is an option its very weak

Skills

Thunder barrier
effect:a coating around the user that blows the opponent with a paralyzing shock
downside:only last a minute(depends on mp)
good things: it deals damage to the attacker and it is also a weapon

Ocular ability:
Effect: lets him see opponents move through out the process of the opponent using it, able to copy abilities
downside:need to be in site of the opponent
good thing: O_O

Summon:
Effect: summons a creature/clone of a person
downside:works 50% of the time
good thing: helps a lot in combat

bio: History of the flames and kels

Spoiler:
 
Credits to camreonkel for the story line above

(other stuff is off element power
and scrolled stuff on body)


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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Sat May 14, 2011 8:40 pm

Spoiler:
 

Meow o3o and you have the story so unorganized dammit dax when i get my computer back you and i are gonna fix this


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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Sat May 14, 2011 8:44 pm

Your Story doesn't flow there gaps about your parents also, lightning an water horribly mix water is a liquid form making it very unstable with electricity while ice is a somewhat solid form and can easily conduct. And Thunder is a sound so do you make sounds from heat expansion.... And your switching from third to first person . Wind is not a lightning element. Also a Ape is not the opposite of a cat......., Not to mention your weaknesses and strength doesn't balance This story is very inconsistant........ and makes no sense ... Do research about the stuff you write before you post.


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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Sat May 14, 2011 9:38 pm

cam and i wrote the story over gmail i wrote the raped and stuff part =P btw blame cat for taking part of the female side and being less adventures then i which is a yin and yang in that fact =3

cats:feminine, lazy, not adventures

monkeys: more male, wildish, fun, more adventures then cats =3 does this make sense
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Sun May 15, 2011 8:38 am

Yo cats are curious more than monkeys cats would do something a monkey would be afraid to do -.- I have a cat she's hella not lazy she acts like a freakin dog ask Joe HE ALSO has a cat AND Dog and note i also volenteer at the zoo for 4 summers work with primates and big cats the big cats were much more active than the monkey.....Also the fact the females are more wilder than the males since they could fight better than the males since there more of a protecters i seen this also with lemurs, apes, and gorillias .And it doesn't explain the horrible grammar also there barly any ying yang remove and fix this damned story or this will be removed and fix by me.

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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Sun May 15, 2011 9:24 am

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Yo cats are curious more than monkeys cats would do something a monkey would be afraid to do -.- I have a cat she's hella not lazy she acts like a freakin dog ask Joe HE ALSO has a cat AND Dog and note i also volenteer at the zoo for 4 summers work with primates and big cats the big cats were much more active than the monkey.....Also the fact the females are more wilder than the males since they could fight better than the males since there more of a protecters i seen this also with lemurs, apes, and gorillias .And it doesn't explain the horrible grammar also there barly any ying yang remove and fix this damned story or this will be removed and fix by me.

This is why Tammy's awesome
And she has a huge point Dax
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Thu May 19, 2011 8:20 pm

how does i do the spoiler thing O_O
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Fri May 20, 2011 1:06 pm

1 a ulitime barrier that's overpowered who would be able to break it. 2 I'm pretty sure thats from xmen gambite and a guy from maplemations
Illusion also pretty sure I heard it from a book cough twilight cough nice going
And there's now 2 last resort so technically you cant die I see to many references from anime and other people good going

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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Fri May 20, 2011 2:49 pm

i watch too much anime illusion im pretty shore im not the only one who uses and the ultimate barrier is a name of it doesnt mean its ultimate you have to be a strategic to figure out the weak points =P and the ultimate defense isnt like that seriously xmen i dont do that anime yes i do XD illusions was a based on character thing i was originally gonna make it explosives and illusion but i was more of a speed guy myself so i added lightning
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Fri May 20, 2011 2:50 pm

btw (sorry for doubling...again) the ultimate defence has a time of 5 minutes or less depending on how strong you are
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Fri May 20, 2011 4:02 pm

Still doesnt explains for the rest of unoriginal things

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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Fri May 20, 2011 4:07 pm

fine ill edit all my moves btw i thought of blaze burner before cams giga lazer cam you have to say the right thing here
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Sat May 21, 2011 1:02 pm

oh wow you gais are takin care of err' thing arent ya ?

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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Sat May 21, 2011 6:08 pm

yea =P
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Sun May 22, 2011 3:57 pm

not you.

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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Sun May 22, 2011 9:43 pm

oh O_O
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Tue May 24, 2011 7:27 am

Ok time to do this again

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Name:Dax

age:13

race:33.3/9 % human 33.3/9 % demon 33.3/9 % monkey <----- does that even make sense
yet again that would get you a little over 100%
Class: bounty hunter

height: 5.8 1/4 (this is my actual height =P)
Damn you're as tall as me o.o
weight: 120

personality: smart half the time, and a strategic, thinks of others before himself
Explain a little more
weapon(s): kunai, anything long range, swords

alliance: jna and maplemation(i'm in maplemation a lot)

element(s):lightning, fire, and darkness

strengths: close combat, range, swords, kunais, guns, anything metal

weakness: banana, light/holy, water, wind, coke

Abilities

Blaze burner ( similar to camreons giga lazer in some ways )
in indepth description of your skills *tisk* *tisk*
Summon kunai (not really an ability other then i created the scroll) ( arm scroll summons kunai )

Drain (transfers moves... how did i get it you ask well i went to cham world one day helped cham beat the guy that stole most of his moves and used his move (drain) to get that move =P complicated) drain wares of in 24 hours (how do i keep the move if it was drained you ask well like cam i make clones too except real clones of myself so i keep draining clones everyday before 24 hours come =P)

Clones:replicates me so any one with ocular powers cant tell the dif

Substitution:subs me in with a dummy

Back from the grave: if im about to die this move will make an exact copy of me and the one that died will disappear ( easy right...wronggggggg if i make a mistake i will die unless im scrolled or have a priest with me to make a perfect heal )

Susano: my skeleton friend who is connected to me by my spinal cord he is the greatest barrier know and is able to fuse with the host.(thats the demon me)

Electric barrier: if someone comes in contact of me they get shocked if the 10 min(1 min in maple time ) barrier is on.

Electric blade: it's basically my blade extended with my lightning powers/my darkness powers.

Electro prison: a prison made of electricity O_O

illusion: pauses the person where s/he is and makes them be in their worst nightmare

card explosives: cards that are like mines in this case

the rabbid tammy summon: chances are im gonna die if i let this one loose O_O ( naw jk tammy ) =3

nuke explosion: explodes my electrical barrier around me in a nuke like form argo it destroys everything

cam egg: summons a sub cam doll in my place =3
Cam egg... you don't even know the point of the egg idea and you're still using it oh well
copy: my eyes are stolen from naruto so yea if you watch naruto you know what it is ( basically lets me imitate the move

last resort: i seal the person in my body and in any case of another battle each time i look like im bout to die that person i absorbed dies ( only reason its my last resort is because 75% death unless in a demons position then they are already dead so yea)

cloths beam: pimps out someones cloths ( idk why i made this... oh yea to explain what i did with cams old cloths in my series XD )

bio: History of the flames and kels

Long ago, about five hundred generations back, the first twins of the Flame family were born. One of the two a girl, and the other a boy.
The male twin was physically strong and fast, born with control over fire and lightning, and also very skilled with blade type weapons. Not only did he have these abilities, but he was also fifty percent primate, like most Flame members, allowing him to transform back and forth between his primate form and human form, he could even transform halfway instead of full.
His sister lacked his strength, but was just as fast, even with his lightning abilities active. Like her brother, she was also born with control over an element, water. What she couldn't do with her strength, she made up for with magic. Unlike her brother, she excelled with magic, which in turn helped make up for her lack of physical strength.(Buffs) Like the majority of the other Flame members, she was also fifty percent animal, only instead of a primate, she was fifty percent feline, the first feline in the entire family.
When it came time to marry, her twin brother had no problem, since oddly enough, the fact that he was part primate did not affect any woman's affection toward him, but his sister had -the word tr*ouble has been censored by the king <3-. The reason being her powerfull skills in magic, making men afraid of her, as one wrong move could result in their death. Finally, one man asked to marry her, oblivious to any pain she could cause in the future. The man's last name was Kel. He was a great swordsman, and in return for the first feline's hand, he vowed to assist in the protection of the Flame family for all eternity. After that, the man lived up to his promise, and his son and daughter were the first blood related relatives to assist in the protection of the flames. This was proven easy with Mr. Kel's nique ability. He could create an almost clear barrier out of nothing and it was also indestructable. He would only use this technique 3 times a day.
The traits of the two twins were past down within their families, all Kel's learning magic, training their skills with the water element, sword training, and every so often a kel born with the ultimate barrier technique would be taught how to use it and warned on its limits, and the Flame's with their respective skills. As for the animals, the Kel's remained felines, never giving birth to a child that was part primate, or partially both.
Every so often, out of pure luck, a Kel child would look like a twin to a Flame child, and vice versa. With even more luck, a Kel girl and Flame boy would resemble the first twins in the Flame family. Even to this generation, the protection plan established by the father of the Kel's is still in affect.

Credits to camreonkel for the story line above

birth of the bounty hunter:
the bounty hunter was founded in the rare case of to many outlaws it was founded by my great great great great great (i think O_O) great grandpa at that time the idea was still going about a new class and when the job instructors herd about it they thought why not (at this time the crime rate was low and it wasnt going to be called the bounty hunters till 5 years later) so they picked the most skilled people of the 5 classes darax flame the greatest warrior, artheus kel the greatest long ranged priest,(ill finish this tomorrow)

fun facts and spoilerness ( lol im such a spoiler if you go and watch my series ill tell you the ahead note that im a full pledged bounty hunter at that point XD ) the bounty hunter is a class of skilled assassins, warriors, and pirates(i didnt say archers cause it takes to long to reload =P) , in some cases priests because of their healing ability

all bounty hunters learn to summon clones of a priest, their calling animal(in my case a monkey), and weapons.
Dax this part is the actual bio, not the stats, but the story(ies) behind your character. Meaning that it should look like a final draft, or at the very least look like proper sentences.
Also the bounty hunter class has been around longer than six/sevn generations back, and this also sounds like a completely altered form, so at least change or add to the name of the class.


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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Tue May 24, 2011 2:48 pm

fuck of cam my class my rules your class your rule -___- and why not gmail anymore D=
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Tue May 24, 2011 3:40 pm

daxflame100 wrote:
fuck of cam my class my rules your class your rule -___-

technically it was just a suggestion and no need to result to cussing
why not gmail anymore D=
My mom took my phone and my computer's not fixed :P
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Tue May 24, 2011 3:45 pm

the how are you online now O_O
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Fri May 27, 2011 3:59 pm

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the how are you online now O_O
[color=cyan]Cause i'm using my grandfather's computer, and two questions
1.Are you done with the bio?
2.Where's the story on you?
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Fri May 27, 2011 4:00 pm

that doesnt explain why you cant go on gmail =P no im not done cause im working on mbr and im thinking up one
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Wed Jun 01, 2011 6:31 am

I remembered where i first saw exploding cards o3o Gambit from X-men XD
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Wed Jun 01, 2011 1:32 pm

dont tell anyone that XD based off that character but better ass stuff
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PostSubject: Re: dax's re-edited bio   Wed Jun 01, 2011 4:08 pm

daxflame100 wrote:
dont tell anyone that XD based off that character but better ass stuff

... i don't think i have too
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